Six months ago a neighborhood was taken from their homes by the CDC. They were informed that they’re all infected with this unknown, so far untreatable disease and they will all be isolated to a hospital floor. Months have gone by. Some have passed, some are barely hanging on. Some believe they have a chance of getting out of there some day. Most believe survival is unlikely. One particular man has yet to give up hope despite the evidence. Clark is his name. Day after day he wishes the doctor will come in with the cure telling him and his family they can go back to their old everyday lives. He talks to a few of the other patients there who clearly have given up hope of survival. And never hesitates to page the nurse whenever he feels something is wrong with his son. He barely sleeps kept awake from stress and hearing the others cough.
One night when everyone is asleep Clark hears a creak on the floor. Curious who’s there, a mysterious stranger appears by the name of Pseudo. He gives Clark exactly what he has been asking for a cure to this disease. Only one problem there’s only one dose of the cure. Which means the power is in Clark’s hands for deciding who gets to get out of here and go live their lives while everyone else is stuck there waiting for the inevitable. Clark has to decide between his son Bobby, the love of his life Janet or himself. Bobby is deteriorating by the minute. Janet has lost all hope of survival while Clark still tries to remain hopeful. Will the time he wastes debating who gets their life back come back to haunt him? Will this be too much for one man to handle?
Ideal Cast
Clark: Josh Radnor
Janet: Rashida Jones
Bobby: Max Charles
Pseudo: Johnny Depp
Nurse: Joan Cusack
Charlie: Ed Westwick
Doug: Freddie Highmore
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The ending of the screenplay was unexpected but executed well by including suspense and heartbreak. There were times were I would like to see less dialogue and more emotions through the character.
ReplyDeleteMet goal #1 by including flashbacks in the screenplay and having the son become very, very sick.
ReplyDeleteThe irony of what they wished for is shown through the action blocks and dialogue.
ReplyDeleteThe flashbacks and the sickness of the son allowed her to accomplish her intention of showing a character in a struggle with a decision.
ReplyDeleteShe created goal number 1 by including some flashbacks and making the sons illness very prevalent throughout the screenplay.
ReplyDeleteThe flashbacks helped the reader to understand the story better as well as achieved her first goal
ReplyDeleteGoal 3 of having a dark tone is met by having a deadly illness and also by having some of the characters lose hope through the story.
ReplyDeleteShe accomplished the first intention by effectively using the flashbacks and the the son's illness was very prevalent throughout the story.
ReplyDeleteAbe Anics: Maeve accomplished intention #1 by using flashbacks. She also achieves a dark tone by making the deadly illness a major point throughout the story.
ReplyDeleteYou achieved your first intention by including the flashbacks. The sickness created a dark and sad tone.
ReplyDeleteby using the flashbacks (goal #1) a scared and hopeful tone was created, which lead to a very interesting screenplay
ReplyDeleteGood job accomplishing your goal by creating a dark tone and having flashbacks
ReplyDeleteThe first goal was achieved because the dad had a flashback of the specific day the son was dreaming about. The father has to make a very difficult decision and by having that image in his head of his son, it makes it more difficult.
ReplyDeletethe goals were achieved. the husband kept hoping for a cure even though the wife gave up.
ReplyDeletehit the first intention by including flashbacks.
ReplyDeleteMaeve’s third goal was met because the irony of what they had wished for is shown when the characters are talking and through their actions. Her first goal was also met by including flashbacks and having their son become sick.
ReplyDeleteHer intention to include flashbacks was met in this screenplay
ReplyDeleteWith the use of flashbacks and the well-being of the kid deteriorating, you accomplished your first goal very well.
ReplyDeleteMaeve hit her intention well as the the end of the screenplay was unexpected while at the same time suspenseful. It felt as if the dialogue may have taken away from some of the emotions between characters but overall this screenplay hit every intention on point.
ReplyDeleteHer intention of showing how the characters were feeling, and also she accomplished showing flashbacks in the story.
ReplyDeletegood job using flashbacks to accomplish the goal
ReplyDeletegoal number 3 of a dark tone is accomplished with the illness
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